In Vino Veritas (Truth in Wine)

16 Jul

Jason is back again with his Short Fiction Contest. And it gets harder this time around. Although the world limit has thankfully remained the same(250 or less), the picture makes you think hard.

Check it out.

In_Vino_Veritas_Jason_Evans

Here’s my take on the picture. I know it’s not a very creative peice, but i tried my best. Maybe sometime later i will come up with a better one.

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The Misgiving

 

“Honey, I’m home!!!”

Mariah? Honey???

“Oh! There you are. I brought your favorite bottle of wine baby”

“What’s the occasion?” She said frowning.

“We are together, and that’s reason enough to celebrate, isn’t it darling??”

“Okay, if you say so”

What a liar. I can smell her perfume on his shirt.

“So how was your day?”

He was sounding so unlike himself.

“Umm…. The usual”

“Well I had a pretty good day. I’m getting promoted next month. Todd says once we are through with the Zeta deal, it’s just a matter of days.”

 “Oh well congratulations then. I’m happy for you” this sounded so unconvincing and shallow even to her.

 “You didn’t get the wine sweetie??”

 “No I kept it for later, let’s have it on the patio after dinner”

 “As you say baby”

 He was waiting on the deck, thinking about Mariah, and how happy she made him. She seemed a bit off colour today.

Well that would change in a while, he thought, a faint smile appearing on his face.

She took the bottle from the kitchenette, and crept her way to the terrace.

“Hey!!… I …… Ahhhhhhh!!!!!”

He fainted, blood oozing out of his head.

“You think you’ll cheat on me and I’ll never get to know? You scoundrel!!!” she screamed and pushed him down the verandah.

The ring gleamed with all its brilliance midst broken glass and the wine on the floor.

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Even if you dont like mine you can check out the other entries here, and i’m sure you’ll be thankful. 🙂

So go on read… enjoy…. 🙂

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9 Responses to “In Vino Veritas (Truth in Wine)”

  1. SiD July 16, 2009 at 10:36 pm #

    I liked the concept…but it could be a bit more terrific.
    Basically you have used too many he and she…that makes it a bit confusing…but hey nice story line.

  2. adi July 17, 2009 at 4:26 pm #

    who says it isn’t creative? its dark n un expected… a total thumb up kiddo!

  3. Preeti Shenoy July 29, 2009 at 3:10 pm #

    I did like it..But i think the 250 word limt is a big constraint–else it could have been built up a bit more.

    BTW I mailed the card today 🙂
    Cheers
    preeti

    • Amrita Bhatia July 29, 2009 at 3:19 pm #

      Hi Preeti,

      Thanks for stopping by. I’m glad you like it. 🙂 Also I agree the 250 words limit was a constraint, but its fun when you have to stretch your imagination for the picture and limit the words too.

      Also, thanks for the card. 😉

  4. lena August 6, 2009 at 10:55 pm #

    that definitely came unexpected. Really a good effort, but am sure you could have made it better, 250 words are way too little to make it perfect

  5. Manish August 16, 2009 at 9:39 pm #

    I guess this is a story of the times;
    more so the title In Vino Veritas (Truth in (S)Wine)
    🙂

  6. Benny August 26, 2009 at 11:26 am #

    Hey first time here!!V impressive! wil keep following…
    As ur a member of Indiblogger,do vote 4 me as my blog has been nominated for the best blog award in “Literature-short story section” for the month of August!..Do check my short stories @ http://www.itismyworldhere.blogspot.com and if you feel,I’m worthy enough to win the award,do vote for me @ http://www.indiblogger.in/nominations.php?id=4 ….Thx ya

    Blog Name: Welcome to my world -Benny

  7. Sudip September 2, 2009 at 9:42 pm #

    Where art thou vanished?

  8. Ravan September 25, 2009 at 2:52 am #

    Didn’t see you for a while…is everything ok? where are you???

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